It's done, it's done! Freshly baked!
To be honest, your writing isn't that good. So I decided to only give you a little *.
Although the theme of " transmigration " was very old and not new, there were still people watching it! First of all, I want to tell you," It's really funny!”What the hell, I'm dying of laughter.
You're also a comical person, but I think your writing isn't that good. To put it simply, you're a little too immature. I wonder if you're a student? Or did you read a time-travel novel or TV show and wrote it?
Sometimes, the words that appeared did not make sense, which meant that you should be a newcomer. The plot was very cliché. The characters were very cliché. The language was still very cliché. To be honest, I feel like I'm reading a journal.
Presumably, this is also your greatest, greatest, greatest flaw. Your language is too dull and boring. There was no three-dimensional effect. He was just talking about one person's experience. There were no ups and downs in the plot.
The description was not detailed, as if everything was written in one stroke. Actually, you can describe the appearance of the characters. Well, for example, Liu Xue's appearance and Shangguan Ling's appearance. You can add more ink. There is also the scenery of Shangguan Mansion and Liu Mansion. You can describe it, which will make your article shine.
In addition, the description of the character's expression could also be described more. This way, your writing will be lively and won't be rigid. Moreover, it could also make the readers more immersed in the story. This way, there would be more comments and more tickets. As for other things, he could enrich the plot a little more. If he did not have any inspiration, he could read other people's articles. Of course, plagiarism is absolutely not allowed.
However, your writing also has a lot of shining merits. Well, actually, in some details, your essay is indeed quite novel. For example, Violent Woman transmigrated. Actually, I rarely see this. Also, he could actually wear it to show his identity. It really made people unable to hold back their laughter. Hehe, I hope you can work hard. Look up to the Almighty!
(Speaking of which, wasn't my words a little vicious…Meow, don't mind it too much. You must work hard!)）
##A fierce girl has just grown up
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