The name is not bad. Just by looking at the introduction, you can tell that you have chosen a path full of thorns. It is very difficult to write in the first person.
Compared to your word count, there aren't many clicks and recommendations.
The fan list was filled with Apprentices, which meant that the number of followers was not bad.
August 1st. The editor loves you very much.
"Your beginning is not bad. It's not bad. I like it very much. I read it immediately. The setting is very interesting."
Although the toothpaste was a little unbelievable, he didn't dislike it. He also felt that it wasn't realistic to disguise himself.
"Next, because I rarely read otaku novels, I might be biased. I'm just using it as a reference.
The reason why an otaku battle was interesting was that it was a constant battle of wits, but it had to be based on rationality.
If there were obvious flaws in the text, it would inevitably make people feel that it was not credible.
The emperor's wife and the imperial physician could meet in private? There wasn't even a nanny accompanying him? Wasn't this too casual? many words
Even if it was to treat a patient, it felt extremely illogical.
I found your opening very interesting. I thought you would write about the life of a disguised granny in the palace and socialize with the nobles in the palace.
How should he put it? It was more like a farming novel. It was a pity to turn it into an otaku battle.
Handsome, delicate, can't you use other adjectives? Your writing is very serious, especially the few imperial concubines.
If that Consort Ru and Consort Zhen were to switch roles, it didn't seem to be a problem.
Really, I have to say, your palace fights are very childish.
It was written too plainly. For example, when the emperor returned, you could have brought it over with one sentence. Actually, you could have written a small sentence.
The might of the heavens was unpredictable. When the emperor was enraged, the palace would be shaken. How the emperor would react and how the other imperial concubines would react could be completely written out.
This way, the readers would feel more immersive. For example, the emperor knew that he could not do anything to Consort Ru, but he still had to punish her a little.
When she paid her respects, she deliberately did not call her up and left her hanging. Then, she personally went down to help Consort Zhen up to show her distinction.
As an emperor, wasn't it normal to play with such a simple balancing technique? It was easy for the emperor to stand out by writing like this.
When writing a story, try not to use a few sentences. It was best to use various scenes to promote the development of the story.
Where are the pig's feet? Where's your outstanding pig's trotters? Why did a bunch of boring extras take turns to appear?
Things Are Getting Interesting Again, Indeed, Pig Feet Are More Attracting.
Eh, why did Pig's Foot rely on those unreliable transmigration novels to survive?
If you had transmigrated, would you think about the transmigration novels you read in the past?
Or do you decide your words and actions based on your real-life experience?
How should he put it? The author could always throw out a suspense at the right time, making people want to continue reading.
However, the plot is not intense enough. It should be like the waves of the sea. Most of the time, your text is like a calm lake.
You can delay the text.
Ai, your beginning was in vain.
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roar ~~~
I looked up at the sky and shouted. If only I had known my stepmother earlier.
The inadequacies were completely pointed out.
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